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February 28, 2019
Had to keep going back to finish the book finally. I found all of the characters to be really immature, especially the lead male character. He came across as an entitled sixteen year old. I am also not a fan of wimpy female roles.
Besides the lack of maturity in the characters was the lack of adequate editing, punctuation especially. And, the repetitiveness of the "omg (s)he loves me, how can (s)he love me?" Nearly every page!
If you're going to write in first person, then understand how to do it. Who thinks to themselves, "I need to talk to my father, Roger, today." Don't you know who your father is, what his name is? We don't say our father's name when we're thinking about him because we already know it! That's just one of the many, many cases of mistakes like this. A good editor should have caught that, but more importantly, the author should never have made so many glaring errors like this.
First book by this author, and will most likely be my last.